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Old 18-Jun-2006, 10:48
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Default Re: Kindly Check My Grammar....thanks!

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Originally Posted by Fazzu
Hello Mitang,
Welcome
Hope I am correct in correcting your mistakes.But make sure you check with the teachers again to confirm.Let me take a try
Hello Aunty,
How are you?It's been a long time since I've seen you online.Well,I guess you are fully occupied in your work especially being a new bride.How's Uncle Tom?Kindly convey my regards to him.Congrats to both of you!
By the way,grandpa called up yesterday.They were having hard time because of the failure of the electrical supply in the province.They were experiencing total blackout.I think it's the aftereffect of last month's typhoon where the storm wreaked vast destruction in our place.Even our house near the rice field was ruined!They have built a small nipa hut for the care taker but it's for temporary use only.The cell sites were also affected that's why they have to use a metallic piece or the antenna to receive phone signals.
But the problem is,the antenna that grandpa is using was also damaged.To cut the story short,grandpa is asking for financial help from you,"if it's ok with you".He can't do anything because of the blackout.It's fine with him even he counldn't watch news but it bothers when he is unable to keep contact with us nor do we can with him as there's no signal in their place.He needs to fix the antenna and the house near the rice field.In order to do that he would be needing 15,000.But the sad fact is he dosen't have enough money to pursue his plans unless your help.
It is possible to call his mobile phone when he's in high places,where signals are available,like in the rice fields.But he seldom goes there now.So,you may just reply to this e-mail and I'll just relay your message to him when he calls back.Grandpa is waiting for your response.Thanks.
Have a nice day!
It's very good, Fazzu, but there are still a couple of errors:

"Hello Aunty,
How are you?It's been a long time since I've seen you online.Well,I guess you are fully occupied in your work, especially now you are a new bride.How's Uncle Tom?Kindly convey my regards to him.Congrats to both of you!
By the way,grandpa called up yesterday.They are having a hard time because of the failure of the electrical supply in the province.They have experienced a total blackout.I think it's the after-effects of last month's typhoon when the storm wreaked vast destruction in our place.Even our house near the rice field was ruined!They have built a small nipa hut for the caretaker but it's for temporary use only.The cell sites were also affected and that's why they have to use a piece of metal or an antenna to receive phone signals.
But the problem is,the antenna that grandpa is using was also damaged.To cut a long story short,grandpa is asking for financial help from you,"if it's ok with you".He can't do anything because of the blackout. He doesn't mind not being able to watch the news, but it bothers him that he is unable to keep in contact with us, nor we with him, as there's no signal in their place.He needs to fix the antenna and the house near the rice field.In order to do that he will need 15,000.But the sad fact is he doesn't have enough money to pursue his plans without your help.
It is possible to call his mobile phone when he's in high places,where signals are available,like in the rice fields.But he seldom goes there now.So, you could just reply to this e-mail and I'll just relay your message to him when he calls back.Grandpa is waiting for your response.Thanks.
Have a nice day!"
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