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From the picture below, we can see two opposite scenes. In 1900, people found they can earn money by fishing, so people in droves went fishing. As the time past, more and more people went to the sea, and the number of fish has drastically decreased. By the year 1995, few fish remained in the sea. Ironically, there were many boats, embark the dream of to be rich, went to the sea.
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Say
in the picture. Use
could to describe something that happened in the past. Say
as time passed. Put the phrase
in droves after the verb. Perhaps:
- In the picture below, we can see two opposite scenes. In 1900, people found they could earn money by fishing, so people went fishing in droves. As the time passed, more and more people went to the sea, and the number of fish has drastically decreased. By the year 1995, few fish remained in the sea.
Does the writer mean to suggest that commercial fishing did not exist before 1900? What was it that made people think they could get rich by fishing? I don't think that you mean to say that the total number of fish decreased but that the fish people were looking for became scarcer. (I couldn't do anything with the last sentence.)
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The purpose of the drawer may told us something about sustainable development. As the saying goes: ”The greatest threat to mankind is mankind itself!” If this is indeed the case, then the current situation should make us ponder our future existence. If we ignore the rule of the nature development, natural would punish us. Just as the fish in the sea, if we didn’t fishing overladen, the number wouldn’t be so small.
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In the first sentence, use
artist instead of
drawer and
tell instead of
told.
Nature is the noun and
natural is the adjective. Those two words need to change places. I'm not sure what you mean by that last sentence. Perhaps: "If we don't overfish, the fish will remain plentiful."
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Therefore, it is imperative for us to take drastic measures. For one thing, it is important for us to set limit to the development of fishing. For another, we should show our conscious about natural resource. Because we should give fishes a proper situation to grow up, and then we could have amply fishes to go fishing.
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Change
limit to
limits. I am not sure what you mean by
conscious. Perhaps you mean to say something like: "We need to safeguard our natural resources." You need to totally rewrite that last sentence.
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