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Old 16-Sep-2006, 15:25
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Default Re: need editing. and opinion

Using "vending machine" ten times in four short paragraphs is too much.

School vending machines are popular and for good reason: studens enjoy the nutritious feel-good food they provide and schools make a significant profit on the sales.

Aren't more nutritious options being offered? For the sake of your argument, I hope so. In any case, I would avoid the term "junk food."
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