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Old 23-Nov-2003, 17:33
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"It was two weeks ago when I attended to an enjoyable party; it was for one of my best friend’s birthday, Mary. It took place in her nice and spacious country house.
  • Two weeks ago I attended an enjoyable party. It was a birthday party for Mary, one of my best friends. It took place in her nice and spacious country house.
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I remember meeting the charming Peter, well actually it was a difficult person to forget; flashy clothes and tousled hair, which made it a bit tricky to lose track of him. Peter was very tall, and he had big problems when moving in this old cottage with the original beams and low ceilings.
  • I remember meeting the charming Peter, who made an unforgettable impression. He wore flashy clothes. He was very tall, and he had tousled hair. I remember that he had trouble moving about in that old cottage with original beams and low ceilings.
You don't want to use tricky to lose track of, because that makes it seem like you were trying to lose track of him.

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