Can you see what's wrong here?
travel worn
dandy-lion (I'm a British English speaker and this is certainly wrong to me)
I probably should have stopped and taken a break at some point, but the need to be here had been too strong- Is this the thesis statement? I am not that sure of the need for a thesis statement in a descriptive piece of writing, but does this really encapsulate the purpose for writing? I think it might need a bit more.
sad windows- nice phrase
I thought this was a good piece of writing, though, as Mariner says, it is more narrative than descriptive. You jump into the present tense at the end of the first paragraph- how about delaying it till the second?
