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Old 08-Oct-2006, 11:15
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Default Re: please review and rate my essay

Some people prefer to study alone, while other with friends.- I'd delete this sentence as it just repeats what's in the question and doesn't answer the question.
the once nature,- individual's nature which...
I would prefer - I see no need for 'would' here unless you cannot actually study alone now
and I have following reasons:- you shouldn't end the paragraph with a colon, so rephrase this
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