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Old 26-Oct-2006, 03:25
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Post Why is the second sentence better?
My wife says my writing is choppy and doesn't flow well. Below is an example. Can you please tell me why the second sentence sounds better?

Thank you.


1. I need to look at some sentences from some favorite passages and break them down for the grammar value.


2. Grammar value is important to my writing so I need to look at some favorite passages for structure.
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