 Re: Some editing required
For example, any pupil whose attendance is very poor, he or she should not be allowed to sit for the examination, otherwise the purpose of our examination is defeated and students will make a mockery of it.
It would be better to delete ", he or she" and rephrase the second part
As you mentioned in your examination notice, the purpose of having the examination is to determine students' progress from January to May 2006.
Avoids the use of "their" in consecutive sentences
Those who are not eligible, we must not allow them to be on the examination list.
I would rephrase this : "We must not allow those who are ineligible to be on the examination list."
They should know that their failures are well-manifested in their absenteeism.
Replace this "They" with "Students" - otherwise there is a confusion about what they refers to.
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