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1. The Dragon Boat Festival is the another significant festival in Chinese traditional celebration. 2. The dragon boat festival is celebrating on the fifth day of Lunar May. 3.This holiday is to commemorate the death of Chyu Yuan; a well-loved poet of the fourth century B.C. 4. Chyu Yuan drowned himself to protesting his king’s despotic rule. 5.The villagers respected him so much that they rowed their boats down the river and dropped chung-tze. 6. Rice dumplings, into the river to feed the fish, so the fish would not eat Chyu Yuan’s body. 7. To celebrating the dragon Boat festival, families does several things. 8. Such as make chung-tze, hang the moxa herb, and watch the dragon boat race.9. Before the Dragon Boat festival, every family prepare chung-tze. 10. This is a kind of rice dumpling filled with various things, such as bean curd, meat, mushroom, and shrimp, and then wrapped in bamboo leaves and steamed. 11.The mother and children works together to preparing the chung-tze.12. Then, each family also have to buy moxa herb and hang it in a special location. 13. The reason for this is that the moxa herb can get rid of bad luck in the family. 14. Some people even use these herbs to wash sick babies for they believe that this special festival can bring some “transformation” in people’s lives, usually, the father and the boys find a location to hang the moxa herb.15. After preparing the chung-tze, each family go to the river to watch the dragon boat races, who take place on this festival day. 16. The dragon boat race symbolizing the story of Chyu-Yuan. 17. It is a rowing boat team competition with about thirty people in each team, all the spectators cheer and shout enthusiastically. 18. After the exciting race, both the competitors and spectators usually eating many chung-tze.19. The Dragon Boat festival symbolizes the unique meanings of Chinese history furthermore, the process of make the rice dumplings, the hanging of the moxa herb, and the boat races are good ways of drawing all members of the family together. 20.Perhaps, one day we have a very different celebration, but so far, I still like this holiday being celebrated in a traditional way.
Edited Text:
The Dragon Boat Festival, celebrated on the fifth day of Lunar May, is another significant festival in the Chinese traditional celebration. This holiday commemorates the death of Chyu Yuan, a well-loved poet of the forth century B.C., who drowned himself to protest his king’s despotic rule.The villagers respected him so much that they rowed their boats down to the river and dropped chung-tze, rice dumplings, into the river to feed the fishes, so they will not eat Chyu Yuan’s body.To celebrate the Dragon Boat festival, families do several things such as make the chung-tze, hang the moxa herb, and watch the Dragon Boat race. Before the Dragon Boat festival, every family prepares chung-tze. This is a kind of rice dumpling filled with various things, such as bean curd, meat, mushroom, and shrimp, then, wrapped in bamboo leaves and steamed. The mother and the children work together to prepare the chung-tze.Then, each family also has to buy moxa herb and hang it in a special location. Some people even use these herbs to wash sick babies. Since they believe that this special festival can bring some “transformation” in people lives, usually, the father and the boys find a location to hang the moxa herb. After preparing the chung-tze, each family goes to the river to watch the Dragon Boat races that take place on the festival day. The Dragon Boat race, that symbolizes the story of Chyu-Yuan, is a rowing boat team competition with about thirty people in each team. During the race, all the spectators cheer and shout enthusiastically. After the exiting race, usually, both the competitors and the spectators eat many chung-tze.The Dragon Boat festival symbolizes the unique meanings of Chinese history. Furthermore, the process of making the rice dumpling, hanging the moxa herb, and the boat races are good ways of drawing all members of the family together. Perhaps, one day we will have a different celebration, but so far, I still like this holiday to be celebrated in a traditional way.
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