 Re: Short story - comments and suggestions needed. Thanks!
It's very good, but there's some loose phrasing: the piece of fact (para 1)
punctuation: adoptive mother, to be precise
Rosalind had had amnesia due to a car accident since Julia was two- this sounds a bit weird because the accident was when she was two and trhe amnesia since then
were oblivious of their surrounding- to their surroundings |