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In all honesty, I think this would struggle to pass CAE

No matter, I like frank people ;)

It's not that there's much wrong with the writing, but I think it is too simplistic

I am aware of the lack of more vocabulary. From now on, I promise I will use a synonyms dictionary ;). 'frown upon' was the only expression I looked up in the dictionary

By using conjectures, did you mean I should use modals such as may, might, must to guess and make conjectures?

Let's take an example:
People go on studying after high school for many reasons. Some of them attend college to have a degree, others in order to increase their knowledge and few people because they just want to be in touch with others.

You start with saying many, but then give three, which I think doesn't count as many.

How about something like this:
There are three main reasons for continuing studying after high school. Some people look on a degree as a qualification that will further their careers, while others view tertiary education as a way of broadening their knowledge.

It shows you are an admirable student ;)

Why don't you have a bash with one of the paragraphs above?

Let's try :)

Finally, in some countries few people go to college in order to be in touch with other people. Although colleges are not places to make friends, few people go to college to meet others and have fun. They think people with the same interests can be found in college and a friendship can start. Despite the fact that going to university is frowned upon, a small number of people go to college to start friendships.

Finally, in some states old folk find academics as a way to be in touch with others. Although these are not spaces to make friends, it is not frowned upon by some citizens. They believe groups with same interests can be form and close friendships would be starting. However, several colleges authorities have stated these associations into colleges and universities only promote isolation. Some universities are discovering the formation of groups into them, with argument over contacting people in academics, while authorities do not like this with the phenomenon.


Ohhh It is much different and finer! :)

Tell me your opinion please, using synonym dictionary pays off in the end ;)

Many thanks! I really appreciate your help :)