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Old 31-Jan-2007, 14:33
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Let's look at that sentence. "The time I spent there" did two things.
The time I spent there
improved my ability to deal with customers in a polite and friendly way

and gave me an opportunity to improve my negotiating skills.
You don't need to say that you took advantage of that opportunity, since that is implied.

What do you think of the revised sentence?

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