[smiln32]

I am responsible for direct selling of the company including profit and loss responsibility, customer growth, revenue production and personnel development. My recent position allows me to further develop and strengthen my communication and interpersonal skills.

I would word this as:

I am responsible for direct sales, including profit and loss activities, customer growth, increasing revenue and personnel development. This position has provided me with an outstanding opportunity to continually improve my communication and interpersonal skills.

And

Presently, I am working as a Sales Executive at First Cambodia Co., Ltd for the last four months.

I would word as:

Presently, I am working as a Sales Executive at First Cambodia Co., Ltd.


Overall, your letter is pretty good. :)

~Carla

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