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Default Re: Correct English-urgent request to correct sentences

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Originally Posted by Asian Learner
Kindly indicate whether the following sentences are correct grammatically:

1. We are serious about bringing the standard of extreme sports in the country to global levels.
2. Common,give it up for the Asian Games.

3. Crowds of over 92,000 in total attendance clearly shows that the Youth Programme knows what excites the new breed of young Malaysians.
4. " Every time I see him out there, I cheer out loud for him", said Jane.
5. "I know the park there is bigger and I want to skate all around there so bad", said the excited skater.
6. Match the correct alphabets to the icons below.
7. City stadium was filled with adoring fans, good music and champion skateboarders, aggressive inline skaters and bicycle stunt riders.
8. The Asian Games and Junior ASEAN Games hosted by Malaysia in February 2004, returned to Kuala Lumpur for their third annual staging and this time, it went indoors at Penang Stadium, Penang.

9. Nancy is engrossing in a draft of United Magazine.

10. Stay in New York hotel or stay in the New York hotel .Can we omit "the" ?

Thanks you English experts out there.
1. We are serious about bringing the standards of extreme sports in the country to global levels.

That is grammatical, but it is not clear to me what a "global level" is.

2. Common, give it up for the Asian Games.

This sounds like a person speaking to a crowd. If so, "give it up" means please applaud and show your appreciation and the opening is probably "Come on,".

3. Crowds of over 92,000 in total attendance clearly shows that the Youth Programme knows what excites the new breed of young Malaysians.

I would use a plural verb "show". The subject is "crowds".


4. " Every time I see him out there, I cheer out loud for him", said Jane.

OK

5. "I know the park there is bigger and I want to skate all around there so bad", said the excited skater.

That is OK, but it could be better. "I know the park there is bigger and I want very much to skate there", said the excited skater.

6. Match the correct alphabets to the icons below.

This is hard to answer. Are you really matching different alphabets? Or are there different leters of the alphabet?

7. City stadium was filled with adoring fans, good music and champion skateboarders, aggressive inline skaters and bicycle stunt riders.

This is OK. One should have a reason for the second "and". Personally, I would place commas after "music" and "skaters".

8. The Asian Games and Junior ASEAN Games hosted by Malaysia in February 2004, returned to Kuala Lumpur for their third annual staging and this time, it went indoors at Penang Stadium, Penang.

This sentence needs work. Since Kuala Lampur is in Malaysia, why is that there at all? How about "In February of 2004, the third annual Asian Games and Junior ASEAN Games were held in Penang Stadium in Kuala Lamour, Malaysia.

9. Nancy is engrossing in a draft of United Magazine.

Nancy is engrossed in a draft of United Magazine.

10. Stay in New York hotel or stay in the New York hotel .Can we omit "the" ?

It would need either "the" or "a".
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