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Old 10-Mar-2004, 16:19
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Default Re: please check

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Originally Posted by kltakky
Dear all,

please help me to check this sentence for correctness.

"Specifications of all the necessary testing activities to be performed and deliverables as a consequence of the testing efforts are presented in this section"

THANK UU SO M UCH!!
I find the sentence very confusing. I think it would read better in the active voice: This section contains....

I would say "specifications for all ....

I don't like the word "deliverables" or the phrase "as a consequence".

I'm not sure how a section can contain something that results from testing. Are you talking about forms, charts, etc.?
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