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Default Re: i'm writing a short story and i need help

Except that your sentence is a comma spice. You have two independent clauses and you cannot properly join them with a comma. You need to end the prior sentence with a period (and in that case, as Angika says, It woud be capitalized), or with a semi-colon (and in that case, as Angika says, it woud be lower case).
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