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Originally Posted by SunnyLiu In addition, the development of international music originates in traditional music. Thus, development itself requires its assistance. |
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- In addition, the development of international music originates with traditional music.
I'm afraid I don't understand the second sentence. :(
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Originally Posted by SunnyLiu In a word, traditional music is a necessary ingredient for the development of music. From what has been discussed above, we may safely arrive at the conclusion that traditional music is mire important than international music. |
Perhaps you meant to say that pop music ("international music") developed from traditional music. (Please correct me if I am wrong.) I don't know if I would say that one form is more important than the other. Perhaps "more meaningful" is closer to what you are looking for? What do you think?
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