Oh thank you very much JLP this is a very kind of you
This essay sounds smoother than before
Happy to be of help
I can also take a look at the final draft, when it's ready.
Well, I've got a few more question here about..
“well-thinking skill” << I just want to say that children should have a thinking skill (a good one) so that they have something to speak. Can I just say a thinking skill? Is it sounds clear?
By the way, instead of "Is it sounds clear?" I would say “Does it sound clear?” in the last sentence. This sounds better to me.
No, I wouldn’t say a thinking skill. I think what you may mean is that the students need to be able to organize their thoughts better in English before they can use the language to successfully communicate. With this idea in mind, I added a reference to students not being able to organize their thoughts well in English to the revised paragraph (again, my additions are in brackets). Let me know if this doesn’t sound like what you wanted to say.
Rewrite the unclear paragraph: Another significant reason why students cannot communicate in English is that they [can not organize their thoughts well. This can lead to difficulties] in speaking. I believe in the saying that “We cannot think unless we have memories”. In order to improve students’ thinking skill and increase their efficiency in English, they will need to memorize many grammatical rules, a large vocabulary and numerous idiomatic expressions. When they are able to manage these, they will be able to think systematically and be able to speak fluently.
ps. Would you like to learn Thai? I can teach you hehe..
Sure