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 Re: Please correct my cover letter
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Originally Posted by Choi  Please check my cover letter which is related to sales business position that wanted to enter some companys. | Delete that wanted to enter some companys (sp). Quote:
Originally Posted by Choi 882-46, Manchon3-dong Suseong-gu, Daegu Cellular : 010-4244-6208 E-mail : EMAIL REMOVED - Send PM to This User Instead September 25, 2007 Mr, Dae-Jung Kim Human Resources Director 3M, Corporation 273-506, song-dong, Chung-gu, Seoul Dear Mr, Dea-Jung Kim This is in response to your advertisement on September 25th, 2007 on the internet. If you are looking for a proper sales business man, I am suitable for the positon you mention. I have good interpersonal relationships and am a team player. I studied Business Administration and Tourism Management at my university. While studying my major, I learnt a financial management, accounting, marketing, SCM and service mind. I worked as a intern in Sevilla hotel from May to Aug, 2005. Through this job, I learned how to take a order politely and what makes a customer feel better. During this summer vacation, I and my friends were elected by Korea Internet Volunteers and then provided IT training course to the Zimbabweans in Africa. I was in charge of leadership training and was an English interpreter at that time. I’m sure that my experience and intern employment can contribute positively to your company. I would enjoy the opportunity to be part of your organization. I will contact you soon to schedule an interview. I would welcome the chance to talk with you about my qualifications for the your position. Thank you for your time and consideration. Sincerely yours Signed Pil-Soo Choi | I hope that helps.
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