Too many words!
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Originally Posted by destiny99  I would like first to introduce briefly about myself. |
That is not good. Anybody who reads that might think you are confused.
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Originally Posted by destiny99 I was born in a family where my parents have strong belief that the most important thing their children should prepare themselves for a good future is education. I myself have been a person who likes to work with numbers since I started at school. I have always been motivated by my parents especially my father and I always try my best to be the best student. Therefore, I have always become an excellent and top student of school from primary school to university. I always feel that I am a high achiever with outstanding study and performance habits. |
My parents strongly believed in education, and they inculcated that belief in their children. I have always done as well at my studies as I could, and I have always been a good student. (I am particularly good at math.) I am a high achiever with outstanding study and performance habits.
(Say: "I was born into a family....")
The original text is confusing and needs to be revised. Your ideas are good, but you express them poorly.
