[RonBee]

Originally Posted by destiny99

I describe myself as a highly motivated, initiative, hard-working, and ambitious person. Furthermore, I am responsible and considerate. I am good at working individually and also working together in team. I easily adapt to new situations and make new friends. I am a person who always learns from my past mistakes and experiences more than anything else. That way, I rarely repeat my mistakes and I wish to become a better person closer toward my dreams and goals.

I am a highly-motivated, hard-working, ambitious person. I am good at working either as an individual or as part of a team. I easily adapt to new situations and readily make new friends. I always learn from my mistakes, and I rarely make the same mistake twice.

You need to learn how to use fewer words to say what you want to say. Also, you need to learn where to make paragraphs.