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Old 01-Dec-2007, 22:26
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Default Re: I'm a go-getter looking for a challenging job

The form is good (mostly). However, you should indent bulleted items.

Suggestions:
  • results-oriented
  • Possesses
  • In phrase "member of kitchen staff team" delete "team".
  • washing dishes
  • Selling souvenirs
  • Make a space (one line) before Education as you are starting a new section.
  • Works well alone or as part of a team
  • Delete "Willing to become professional" (What does that mean?).
  • Say: has highly developed analytical skills and learns fast
  • Most adults have driver's licenses (note spelling). Unless it is a requirement of the job there is probably no point to mentioning that you posses a driver's license.
  • Hobbies:
(I don't guarantee that I have found everything that could be improved upon, nor do I guarantee that you will get the job.
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(PS: You might have noticed that I changed the title of this thread. I will change it back to what it was if you insist.)

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