Wel, I certainly have seen worse, but there is a lot of room for improvement.
One thing is that you try to put too much in your sentences. You need to say something, stop, then start another sentence where you say something else.
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Originally Posted by ddsa  "Lives In Iran"
Persepolis is a book written through Sarapi's child experiences; she talks about how her childhood was alike in Iran with her parent and friends. Satrapi was born in a middle-class family, her father was an engineer, who goes for the demonstration during the war, at that time where the king have the full control of the country, and while the father was out there, the member of the family always worried about whether he could come back from work or not. |
"Persepolis" is a book written from the point of view of Serapi as a child. She talks about what he childhood wa like in Iran. Serapi was born into a middle class family. Her father was an engineer.
I do not have any suggestions for the rest of that paragraph, as I cannot figure out what you are trying to say.
~R