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Old 22-Dec-2007, 09:58
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Default Re: My situation talk writing need corrections and suggestions

Situation 1. At the cinema.

This is the situation: Mika is at the cinema with two of his friends and they have already bought tickets online but... they have got to redeem the tickets from a self-ticketing machine.
I'm not sure what those machines are called. Perhaps it could be 'a ticket dispenser/ a ticketing machine' - Anyone else bought tickets this way and know the correct term??
'a' is used before this 'self-ticketing machine' because this is the first time we hear about it/you mention it. From now on in your story, it would be "the self-ticketing machine". HOWEVER, if there are quite a few of these machines, say, in the theatre lobby, then we would still use "a" because you haven't picked out a specific machine yet.

Mika: Did you book the tickets for Harry Potter 3 as/like we arranged/discussed/planned?

John: Sure. I thought it might have been (already-move to end of sentence) sold out already], you know this movie is so popular/you know how popular this movie is, but I found a few tickets left/ it turned out there were these/a few tickets left.(either expression is fine) I was lucky.

Clair: Well-done, fellow!
sorry, googlegoogle, but this sounds like something out of a 19th century English novel, a 1930's Boys' Own Adventure Stories book, or any of Enid Blyton's Famous Five or Mystery of...books! lol

Clair: Great. Anyway, I'd like a drink. What about getting some Coke?

John. OK,(or Right.) but we (still) need to get the tickets from the machine.
You've already named the "self-ticketing machine", so just 'machine' is fine here. If there is only one machine in the lobby, then "the", if more than one, then, 'from a machine'.
Where is the ticket machine?

The sentence is fine grammatically, but not quite what one friend would say to another in this situation. eg
'Can you see it/can you see one (if more than one)?'

Mike: I'm looking/ I'm trying to see one. Oh, there it is!/ Oh, there's one!


Clair: Where?

Jhon:Oh, I see it. Beside the ticket desk! Hurry up. The movie starts in ten minutes.

Mike: I'm going!! or I'm getting it ('it' here being used =getting on with doing it, getting the tickets)

and the three of them run to the machine and get the tickets (from the machine.-omit)


This is what I wrote for practice, and I'd like your corrections and suggestions.
Please help.

Articles and prepositions are the most difficult concepts in English grammar for me to understand.


Don't let the fact that there seem to be a lot of changes discourage you. THIS WAS EXCELLENT. I have taken the time to show you the way native speakers talk to each other, because it seems you are learning very quickly!
I have to go out, but will proof this more thoroughly when I get back, so if there are grammatical errors, juggling between what you have written and my reframing the text...)
I'll also add when we use, sold out, booked up, booked out.

Last edited by David L.; 22-Dec-2007 at 10:29.
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