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Old 08-Jan-2008, 02:30
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Default Re: please help me with checking my motivation letter

There are only a few things that need (IMO) to be changed. I suggest:
I undertook (instead of "I have undertaken....")
I began studying Spanish (instead of "I started to study Spanish")
world leader (instead of "unquestionable world leader")
their products
I rate their products highly for innovation and design.
Since I was a child I have always wanted to learn to speak one of the Asian languages.
I believe I would be a perfect fit for the position (at Vulcanus).
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