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Thank you very much David L. and RonBee!

First of all I fixed the sentences that RonBee suggested.

Now about David L. corrections:
* You are right, it is neto motivation letter, not application for admission. I gave the last paragaph to sound nice and refined. You think it's totally unnecessary here?
* I posted only the body of the letter and the format of course includes all formal details.
* I also used the guide that you linked from the englishforums.com to compose the letter. I tried to be as clear as possible about my goals and reasons for choosing their Uni. In addition I preffered to tell about my ambitions, experiences and natural skills rather than giving info about myself. So maybe I still should leave some very general info like my residence and name in the body? It can be useful for the impression that the letter leaves..
* About the sentence that you highlited, "why it was important to me..", it is a good point! I thought about it, and I think is because I am very organized and detrment, I hate to leave things on hold and to postpone the solution to the last moment. Thats why I thought about the high education very early.
I'll think about how to express it best in the letter..