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Old 24-Jan-2008, 19:03
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Default Re: Hurry please i need this paragraph checked before 2

Whew - you are cutting it fine!

It looks fine apart from this awkward sentence:

When it would be the last couple seconds of the game and his team would be down by 1 he would

On the occasions when the game was in its last seconds and his team was down by one point,
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