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Originally Posted by Mohammed Abu Risha

Here are my suggestions. On the whole, this is a very well written piece of work. However, I wonder if it answers the question: "How much time do you spend watching TV daily?" Perhaps it would be good if you state in the conclusion something that answers that question. The current conclusion talks about why you watch TV rather than how much time you spend there.


How much time do you spend watching TV daily?

Most of my colleagues, friends and family members find themselves upset if they have to give up the remote controller to someone else. Whenever I hear my familiy members quarrel about which TV program to watch, I feel ridiculous. Don't they have someting more worth doing?

Being a teacher of English, I alway find myself failing to grasp the meaning of the editorials or articles in New York Times before reading them again and again with great efforts. This inability makes me in no mood for anything else aside from my English learning program. Consequently, I can hardly find time to sit in fornt of a TV set and enjoy watching the programs. Over time, TV has lost its attraction to me. When I am tired of learning or working and need some entertainment to relax,I choose to lie down in my bed with my earphones on my head.The only radio program I'd tune in is BBC world service broadcasting.

My husband feels luckier than his counterparts in other families. He never has to fight with me about which program to watch after dinner. But, he has to fight with our daughter, a fourth grader on weekends. My daughter is shun from TV on weekdays with an allowance of four hours' watching TV on weekends. I'd prefer her to watch exploring programs like "Discovery" or " the Wildlife", which indeed broadens her horizon and enriches her knowledge of the world. I forbid her to watch any sitcoms about adult life for fear that the absurd affairs of adulthood might confuse her. Anyway, it is still too early for a small girl like her to peek into the adult world. Am I a
dull mom to my girl? I think no. People have different goals about their lives. Mine is to improve my English to live up to my duty as a teacher of English and to guide my daughter in a positive direction of growing up.

Thank you very much for your revising, Mohammed Abu Risha ! I think your comments on the my improper choice of the title is to the point.I will change it to " Why do you spend time watching TV?" I appreciate all the effort you took to revise my wording and spelling errors. But now ,I have two questions :

The first one, I think the meaning of the following two sentences are different though they both are grammatically correct. In my writing, I wanted to say I feel tired after learning or working for some time so I need to something for a change, so I chose to use " be tired from " instead of "be tired of", which means the repetition of something makes you feel dull. I have learned the difference between the two phrases in a dictionary. Does my argument make any sense to you?

I am tired of learning or working
I am tired from learning or working.


The second one, in the sentence: I'd prefer her to watch exploring programs like "Discovery" or " the Wildlife", which indeed broadens her horizon and enriches her knowledge of the world., "which" refers to programs, so I think "s" in broaden and "es" in enrich are unnecessary. What is your opinion?