Hi! I'm a 19-year-old boy from Germany writing now his first application in English.
I would be very grateful if you could proof-read it and name the mistakes
Thanks in advance!
(Notice: A/B means that A and B differ depending where I'm going to apply; the whole application is via email)
Subject Line: Volunteer Application
Dear Mr./Mrs. Prename Surname,
I am writing to inquire about the possibility of being accepted as a volunteer in your school/kindergarten/college.
Having finsihed the school in 4 months by now, I am looking for an anthrophosophically oriented institution in which I want to work in for one year within my Voluntary Year of Social Service (German “FSJ”) in order to work with children/mentally disabled people, gain more experience in the fields of education and language as well as meet other countries and their cultures.
I am a 19-year-old German on the brink of my a-level exam, very interested in sports, nature and helping others. I love science, computers, painting and music and the work with children/mentally disabled persons.
Therefore I hope I can support you in your daily work with children and in anything else, e.g. cleaning rooms, gardening or other upcoming activities.
For further information, I add a sheet I received from the organization through which I am planning my Voluntary Year of Social Service abroad. If you have further questions, please do not hesitate to contact me.
I look forward to hearing from you.
At the end, I will add some attachments (CV with photograph, certificates).
What do you think of it?
