19-Mar-2008, 23:35
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 Re: Please proofread this text
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Originally Posted by Bassim  I watch them like a film on a screen and I will never go over to the other side and become one of them. If the terrible war did not happen in my home land I would never have ended up in this cold place where real love and feelings are such a rare phenomena. My body is here but my thoughts are far away. Our brain must posses a defence mechanism that protects it from the the environment which is damaging. | I watch them like a film on a screen, and I will never go over to the other side and become one of them. If the terrible war had not happened in my homeland I would never have ended up in this cold place where real love and feelings are such a rare phenomenon. My body is here but my thoughts are far away. The brain must possess a defence mechanism that protects it from an environment which is damaging.
What title would you give this piece?
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