[RonBee]

Corrections, suggestions in blue.

Originally Posted by 764500

I tried to translate an old story in English. But I am sure that there are a lot of mistakes and I would be grateful if you could correct to me, thank you

I tried to translate an old story into English. But I am sure that there are a lot of mistakes, and I would be grateful if you would correct it for me.

The word "it" in the second sentence refers to the story.

Originally Posted by 764500

Briefly that is Deli Dumrul's story: Once upon a time there was a place named Oguz and there used to live Duha Koca's son Deli Dumrul. He had built a bridge on the dried stream and if you go to on the bridge, he had taken 33 akce ( currency ) from you. If you don't go to on the bridge, he had taken 40 akce and as well as he had bludgeoned you.

Briefly, that is Deli Dumrul's story. One upon a time, there was a place named Oguz, and there lived Duha Koca's son Deli Dumrul. He built a bridge over a dry stream, and if you wished to cross the bridge you had to pay him 33 akce (currency). If you refused to cross the bridge, he took 40 akce from you and he bludgeoned you as well.

Originally Posted by 764500

One day, a good looking valiant man had died next to a groups of nomands that Dumrul had seen to this event and he had beard Angel of Death but the God had not like to his speech.

That is not clear enough for me to be able to make any suggestions.

Originally Posted by 764500

So that the God says:
'Look at that crazy man and he do not know to my hegemony that do not thankfulness to me.'

After that the God ordered Angel of Death: ' you are going to go to at once and death threat him after that die him!.'

So God says: "Look at that crazy man! He does not know his hegemony, and he is not thankful to me."

After that, God ordered the Angel of Death: "Go at once. Threaten him with death, and then kill him."