 Re: help me ! please..
I'm not a teacher,but I've done these kind of letters. I would just begin differently: I am writing this letter in order to apply for...
I think it's regarded as a more polite way to put it.
Someone should check the gramar, tenses actually, in the last sentence of the first paragraf. I'm not quite sure that that's correct. Othervise,I think it's ok |