It's later. :wink:
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Originally Posted by tachi At last I was left alone lingering along the line drew on the ground. |
"At last" doesn't work there unless the person had been waiting to be left alone. Try:
- I was left alone (or: by myself) lingering (or: standing) near the line drawn on the ground.
The reader will want more specific information. What line were "you" standing near? The foul line?
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Originally Posted by tachi Over and over I contemplated about a shadow that was cast on this court. |
The word "contemplate" is a transitive verb, and it takes a direct object. Try:
- Over and over I contemplated a shadow that was cast on the court.
What can you use in place of "Over and over"?
:)