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Originally Posted by tachi His adroit shot left me speechless like his every move made the crowd screamed. |
Try:
- His adroit shot had left me speechless just as his every move had made the crowd cheer.
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Originally Posted by tachi I scrutinized him from the crowd for a decade but couldn’t find a word good enough to delineate his smile after each game. |
What might you use instead of "scrutinized"? What might you use instead of "delineate"?
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