[RonBee]

Originally Posted by gonghai

Today, many jobs require an employee to have a driver’s license. For instance, an accountant without a license will find it inconvenient and a waste of time always having to take a bus to see his or her clients. A man in the name of Ben Franklin once said, “Time is money.” Having a license and being able to drive a car would save precious time and money, because the bus does not always arrives at each stop on time and taking the taxi is expensive. Not only that, many people these days tend to be very bias, they will look up to me if I can drive and have my own car. For example, I have noticed many businessmen have very expensive cars, such as, BMW or Mercedes Benz. So in the future I become a businesswomen, I am definite that I will be more successful if I have my own car.

Say: "a man by the name of Ben Franklin" or "a man named Ben Franklin".
Say:

• Having a license and being able to drive a car saves precious time and money, because the bus does not always arrive at each stop on time and taking the taxi is expensive.

Say:

• Not only that, many people these days tend to be very biased. They will look up to me if I can drive and I have my own car.

Say:

• So if in the future I become a businesswomen, I am certain that I will be more successful if I have my own car.

Originally Posted by gonghai

Today, having a driver’s license is almost mandatory. Without a license and not being able to drive in today’s world is inconvenient because the license represent one’s reputation and identification.

Say "Not having a license" instead of "Without a license'. Say: "the license represents one's status and serves as identification."

What do you think?

:)