Hello!
First, thank you very much for your help and a piece of advice you gave. :D
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The second reads more like a newspaper report than a factual report. I presume they want a genuine accident report, in which case the way it is written doesn't fit exactly. It would be fine for an article. If it is a report, shouldn't there be headings and shouldn't it look at the facts, then the cause? Instead of starting with names, start with the crash,, give details,then an explanation.
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Hm...you seem to be right. :?
While writing, I basically stuck to the outlines given in the coursebook (Mission FCE 1). It's in Exam Focus section of the 1st Unit and it's about techniques for writing narratives. The authors divide narratives in two broad sections - stories (imaginary stories, true stories, describing experience, tales etc.) and
factual reports. And that's where they define the latter as actually
news reports (events, current affairs, accidents, disasters etc). So then they explain how these should be structured...
It's strange but I'll bear your suggestions in mind.
(I ignored headings because I wanted to focus on the body of the text...It's not required in the task, either...(As far as I know) One can ignore headings in the FCE just as avoid writing addresses in letters.)
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PS- Change this:
After an expertise the plane crash was put down to engine failure.
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Thanks that you noticed this! It doesn't fit in there at all!
(I'll delete this sentence.)
Hm...Do you think the sentence "God bless you, Mr. Corey." shouldn't be there, either?...It's in personal style...hence, might not be welcome in a report.
You mentioned VCE. What is it?...An exam like FCE, CAE or something?
And again...Many thanks!!! :D