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Old 18-Oct-2004, 12:08
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The opening is good,but this sentence needs some work:
I first became interested in sales assistant. Because I am major in international economics and trade, and your company has the better reputation in the China market. I

The first sentence is incomplete- do you mean to join the two?

I first became interested in sales assistant because my major is international economics and trade


and your company has the better reputation in the China market

'better' is wrong; surely, it should be 'best', or 'finest'?
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