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Originally Posted by felix123 I am a student from Sydney Institute of Language and Commerce of shanghai university. I’ve learned your company is a well-known sports products manufacturer providing excellent sports equipment. Nikko’s products are high qualitied and with fashion too, and that is the reason I like your product.
My major is international trade and marketing, and I desire to be a number of your company to contribute to your sales with my knowledge and ability on the marketing and trade area. I think I will be helpful for marketing position. I have taken marketing course, and I have done a business report with my classmates about promoting the SVA TV to the NewYork market. As you can see, I have some marketing experiences, which will be useful for my marketing assistant position.
I will be available for full-time employment after I am graduated at June 2005.
I’ m looking forward to receive your reply, and thanks for your consideration.
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My try:
1. Capitalalize Shanghai University
2. At June 2005 should be in June 2005.
3. Looking foward to receiving your reply.
4. Nikko's products are high qualitied and with fashion too. (Nikko's products are of high quality and fashionable. Quality is a noun.)
5. Ability on the marketing and trade area. (in marketing and trade area.)
6. I think I will be helpful. (I am confident I will be helpful.)
7. Taken marketing courses.
8. I like your products.
9. I desire to be a number of your company. (I would like to be considered for a sales position... a number of is a typo.)