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 Re: What can I change with my book review?
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Originally Posted by kamel The heroine is Dolores Price. She’s 13, smart-alecky but emotionally scarred, having bid her childhood farewell. After the rape caused by the man she admired, she begins to slowly shut herself away from the world. Her distressed mother, too afraid to press charges, attempts to provide the temporary relief for her daughter, food. Thus beginning the gradual decline of Dolores Price. | The first two sentences are okay, but say: After being raped by a man she had admired....
Say: Thus begins....
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