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Default Re: What can I change with my book review?

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Originally Posted by kamel

Having never suffered from weight problems and having lived in countries with little obesity issues, I always thought of it as a lewd act of self-indulgence and I never understood how people could allow themselves to get so tremendous. This book played a major role in broadening my narrow-minded view of the over weight community. I realized there were more complicated issues behind obesity.
Change "having lived in countries with little obesity issues" to (perhaps) "having always lived in countries with little obesity...."

By "tremendous" do you mean "fat"? "Overwieght"?

Substitute "are" for "were" in the last sentence.

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