Dear Mrs. xxx and Mr. xxx,

my name is Babak xxx and I am a graduated German student of 24 years. I have studied at the "Fachhoschschule für Technik und Wirtschaft - University of Appled Sciences" in Berlin, where I got my first degree: "Bachelor of Science".

I am quite interested in the Master Programm (Msc Management) you offer. I'm going on a trip to Scotland and England to meet some Master co-ordinators to acquire some valuable information. I will stay from 1st February to 14th February in Scotland. I would appreciate it if we could meet, during this time.

I suggest an appointment for the 4th February at 1 pm, otherwise could you please propose an alternative date.

I will look forward to see you. Thanking you in advance.


Your sincerely,


Babak xxx.


(if you use 24 hour system no need to use pm or am, so either say 13 or say 1 pm)

also it's Yours truly or Your sincerely, not yours sincerely

Well, I think this one is a big step in the right direction, let a real teacher correct it for you, I'm still in my first year bachelor :]