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Old 08-Feb-2005, 02:35
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Could you check and correct my CV and cover letter, please?

The text of my cover letter:

7 February 2005

Dear Ms./Mr. ........................... (no need for a full stop in BrE when the abbreviation ends with the last letter of the word, so Mr ...., but Rev. ....)

I found out from the www.reed.co.uk web site of your need for an data entry clerk. I am sure that my recently completed education and work experience make me a strong candidate for the position. Please find attached a copy of my CV.

I graduated from the Warsaw School of Economics, the finest school of economics in Poland (Pawel, I did this because the way you had it looked a bit simplistic) , in 2004 with a Master’s degree in Business Administration. While working towards my Master’s degree I was employed as an office worker in (the???- I'm not sure what this office is) Commune Office in Poland, where I gained a broad knowledge of working within an office environment. I worked as a part of a team and I received a lot of compliments from my co-workers (I don't like this much- they could have been saying you were wearing nice trousers- how about and received positive feeback from my co-workers??). I am convinced that my education and work experience have prepared me for the position in your company. As Poland is a member of the European Union, I need no work permit to work in the United Kingdom.

I am open and communicative but at the same time exacting (what do you mean by exact here- I'm not sure I get it) and have a sense of duty. I tend (sounds weak-I am very involved in all my activities??) to get very engaged in all my activities, even if they are after hours. I am an enthusiastic worker, and enjoy working in a team.

The position you outline is one (no comma) which I feel will (do you enhance them or do they enhance you?? )enhance my practical background. I am sure I could apply the combination of my knowledge and experience to your business. I would welcome the opportunity to discuss the job vacancy with you on the telephone or at an interview. I can be contacted most easily on my mobile or by e-mail (see details at the top of this letter).

Yours sincerely,

Pawel Wozniak (I'd be tempted to put Mr here, as they might not know- I'm assuming from the Czech name Pavel that you're male)



The text of my CV:


CURRICULUM VITAE

Personal data:

name: Pawel Wozniak (Use sentence case- Name, etc)
address: ul. Zamkowa 120, 00-250 Warsaw
date of birth: 10 March 1978
e-mail: EMAIL REMOVED - Send PM to This User Instead
phone: 0048 22 123 45 67

Education:

2002 - 2004 Warsaw School of Economics, Warsaw, Poland
Master's Degree in Business Administration
1999 - 2002 Higher School of Finance and Banking, Radom, Poland
Bachelor's Degree in Business Administration

Work experience:

11.2000 - 05.2001 Commune Office, Jasieniec, Poland
Office worker in the Local Development Department; mainly office work (worked as part of team involved in the development of the local area)

Skills and Other:

languages: Polish - native (Again, capitalise the first word, IMO)
English - very good (knowledge of Business English)
Russian - conversational
computer skills: perfect (I'd say proficient, not perfect, or highly proficiant- can anyone be perfect????) : MS Office (Word, Excell (Probably not perfect if you spell it wrong- Excel ), Access, PowerPoint),e-mail, Internet; very good: (to be honest, I'd probably lump them all together as proficient, rather than being so exact) Adobe Photoshop CS, Paint Shop Pro, Effective Site Studio (making www sites), ability (able) to work with various operation systems
hobbies: books, Internet, computers, history of the Second World War, biking
other skills: clean driving licence

Other activities:

2000 - 2001 preparing articles for the local newspaper
1994 - 1999 member of the local football team

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