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Old 08-Aug-2003, 01:16
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I have just a couple of suggestions.

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BA introduced the automated system on Wednesday despite the opposition.
What opposition to what by whom? Those are important details that I think should be mentioned at that point.

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BA has stopped its TV adverts which tried to promote its low fares and customer service by showing delayed, cancelled flights and empty check in desks at their rivals.
Make that: "BA has stopped its TV adverts which tried to promote its low fares and customer service by showing delayed, cancelled flights and empty check in desks at their rivals's check-in counters."

Overall, it looks pretty good.
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