[jose rocha]

Thank you very much for your help Mr. tdol. Do you think my topic sentence is OK? Is the topic of my paragraph narrowed down enough? Is the controlling idea of my paragraph clear and focused? Is my paragraph unified (do all my sentences support my controlling idea?) and coherent (are my ideas logically arranged?)? Did I use appropriate details and events? Are there any supporting details tha you consider necessary? Is my conclusion interesting?

About the teacher that suggested changing Brasilia for Brazil I think that is a great idea because not everyone knows that Brasilia is the capital of Brazil. So thank you very much for your suggestion!