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Originally Posted by robinm

Imagine a world free of diseases and disorders. Would that not be great?! In order for this to occur Meow! we must take one step at a time, one day at a time, and one person at a time; towards a cure. My desire Fluff is to furnish ? a cure for the sleeping disorder insomnia.
Insomnia means chronic inability to fall asleep or remain asleep for an adequate length of time. Insomniacs lack an essential need for human survival, sleep. Heightened levels of stress; frequent mistakes; higher level of frustration; increased worrying; and the ability to concentrate, are a few effects due to insomnia.
An insomniac’s high stress level manifests itself not only mentally, but physically as well. This causes an individual to make more mistakes repeat, which induces more frustration repeat and worrying repeat. Take ? for example an insomniac working for a prestigious not relevant pharmaceutical company, where he is in charge of distributing the correct amount of milligrams per prescription; but, because of his lack of sleep he reads and interprets the prescription incorrectly and gives the patient the wrong amount of medicine. This poses a danger to the insomniac the wrong medicne does not affect the insomniac, the company he works for, and the patient.
For my plan, of creating a cure for insomnia, to succeed I must become a doctor. Becoming a doctor Repeat will afford ? me the opportunity to gain more knowledge about the human body and its’ functions. I will also learn more about different types of disorders and diseases, the symptoms of each, and the current treatment methods. This will aid me in creating a cure for insomnia. After becoming a doctor Repeat, I will begin ? developing hypotheses and using the scientific process to test their validity. Once I have completed this step I will gain permission from the FDA to test my product on people ?. When these tests come back clean ?, I will then ? launch my cure to the entire world!
I hope to touch the lives of all the people in the world who suffer from this critical disorder. It saddens me ? to know that there are people in the world Repeat who cannot sleep and I am in my bed sleeping as sound as a baby, while they try everything on earth Fluff to get to sleep. These are just a few, of the many, reasons why I plan to become a doctor and create a cure for insomnia.

I marked words/phrases I would change were it my application essay.