I meant to bump up this post but since I have other questions I might as well post them here.
Quote:
Original paragraph:
I run a convenience store named Sun Variety, 1406 King st. E Cambridge, Ontario. The store’s two phone lines had been subscribed to Primus Canada, (519) 623-7251 and (519) 653-4625, when I bought the business along with the whole building on 15 December, 2004 from a person named Kwan.
Alternative:
I bought a convenience store named Sun Variety, 1406 King st. E Cambridge, along with the whole building, and at the time the business’ two phone lines, (519) 653-8882 and (519) 653-4625, were subscribed to Primus Canada.
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I sent this letter to various other places and each time I tried altering sentences. Please take a look at the quoted above. I happen to ditch the 'had been' form in the alternative but I didn't do it intentionally. As I wrote the sentence it just happened.
Do all two paragraphs convey the same meaning? are they all in the same timetable? I was asking because 'had been' and 'was' obviously represent different time period.
I just go with my gut feelings when I use the 'had been' form but I don't feel comfortable using it not knowing what exact time it represents. Please enlighen the ignorant. Thank you very much.