 Re: Two Captains - Part Two
If you were a native English speaker and had written this essay, I would tell you that it is lacking a coherent narrative flow. There are no serious grammatical errors and your spelling and punctuation are acceptable. If this is for a school assignment, please follow your teacher's advise about how to structure your sentences so that they sound more like the natural speech of a native English speaker.
If you would like more help from me, choose one or two sentences from your story and I'll give you some suggestions. |