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Old 27-Nov-2005, 08:04
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Default Re: Can you help me with my statement of purpose?

This is another institution into which I am going to apply for the admission.
The following is the reasons why I chooce it.
I am puzzeled how to organize the reasons by using conjuctions properly.

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I have a number of reasons for my choice. Above all, UNC-Chapel Hill is an energetic community of students, scholars, researchers and scientists. (How to connect the previous sentence and the follow one) Chapel Hill is a new center of scientific research and industry. Moreover, Dept. of Chemistry in UNC-CH has a solid foundation and a long tradition of innovation in all the fields of chemistry. The new UNC Institue of Advanced Materials (IAM) and new building "Science Complex" provide graduate students a more exciting environment to conduct their research. Last but not least, at UNC-CH, I can find a cutting-edge work in the field of polymer materials to which I am aspired, especially in design and synthesis of novel materials and application of these materials. I hope to work closely with Prof. Joseph DeSimone, Prof. Edward Samulski and Prof. Valerie Sheares Ashby in the area of polymer materials. All these above make UNC-CH the most attractive place of research to me. (Use superlative degree or not?)
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Does it sound over-enthusiastic this time? How to avoid such expression? Does it depend on how I use the adjectives?
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