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Old 28-Nov-2005, 04:47
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Default Re: Can you help me with my statement of purpose?

energetic community- lively?
(How to connect the previous sentence and the follow one)- here you could use moreover/what is more/ in addition/ etc
all the fields of chemistry- I wouldn't use the article
new building "Science Complex"- do we need building? If so, put it bafter the name
a cutting-edge work- no article
I am aspired- I aspire
(Use superlative degree or not?)- yes
All these above- All these reasons/ all the above reasons
It sounds better- the choice of adjectives is very important and this sounds keen and has the right tone for me.
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