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Old 13-Dec-2005, 04:06
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Default Re: Need help on an essay. Final Reflection about my writing. Help revise or advive

four or five months which were all- if you only wroite five in total, there should be a comma before 'which'
Of these five essays I feel I had some very interesting stories.- this needs rewriting- not all of these essays would have had stories, also you repeat 'I feel' in the next sentence
to learn I am - comma
my father who- my father, who
was nervous to hand- nervous about handing
outrageous topic- I'd change the adjective- controversial/difficult etc
descriptive telling - description??
so the story can sound- could ( or just 'sounded)
Hate which was very difficult- Hate, which
I wanted- had wanted
last essay which- ,which

PS There are few occasions where I have made a comment about a comma or not before 'which'. If you're not sure whether to put a comma, try this- can you cut the phrase with 'which' out and still have a complete sentence that makes sense. If you can, put a comma in.
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